On April 20th a sudden and disastrous event took place, an explosion on BP contractors drilling platform in the gulf of Mexico caused a spill that has leaked more and more oil to this very day. The environment is being drastically affected by the terrible oil spill. According to S.F. Heron, marine life and wildlife "can be contaminated in a number of way, through poison by ingestion, destruction of habitat and direct contact with oil". This can lead to the animals becoming very ill and dying. When a fish "ingests the oil suspended in the water through their gills", it makes it affects their ability to reproduce, which can later lead to extinction. Extinction will lead to loss of wildlife, food, and jobs for many. These poor animals are living in confusion down there. The ocean use to reflect the sunlight down to the bottom of the ocean, now all they see is darkness.
Many people in charge are doing a terrible job at taking control over the problems that they have created. For some reason BP can not figure out a way to stop what is currently taking place and instead of standing up and taking responsibility, they are sitting there frantically pointing fingers at the next person to come along. Lines seem to have been drawn with BP and President Obama instead of coming together as one to try and work out this HUGE problem. Unless people stop pointing fingers and start working together we are going to get nowhere. This could also completely mess up Obama's reputation as president. If people don't see him step up and take control of the entire situation happening right now, they aren't going to want to re-elect him next term. People already look down on him because something as stupid as his skin color. A problem like this is only going to make things worse.
Adriana – You really develop a strong image of this disaster through your writing. Your arguments concerning wildlife are noted, but in the end, how can extinction of certain animals truly affect the economy of the United States? True it will have an impact on jobs, but what will this do to food prices? I would like for you to develop your arguments a bit more using specific evidence. For instance, you refer to the leaders of BP. Who are they? What specifically has the president stated to BP that has caused the government to finally say enough is enough? Did public opinion influence Mr. Obama’s decision to finally act? Why do you think that this event will truly be enough reason for the voting public not to reelect him in 2012? Overall, this is well done. However, citations? Works cited? Content 5; Organization 5; Total 30/36
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